Chapter 291 What should I do if the script is too bad? (Additional update, words updated!)
Chen Ziyan's question echoed in Lu Yanhe's mind for a long time.
He was also wondering why he hadn't thought of writing a script for himself?
After thinking about it, I think the reason is probably because he subconsciously knows what those movies are like. He knows that if he writes a script for himself, he will fall into a complicated entanglement.
This kind of entanglement is the entanglement of his subconscious imitation of the original work, his lack of confidence in himself, and the hidden shame of being unable to surpass the original work.
However, Lu Yanhe couldn't explain this to Chen Ziyan.
Why can he read the script of this world with a normal mind?
Because these scripts do not have a formed image in his mind, and there is no completed performance, he can interpret them according to his own understanding.
But the scripts he wrote himself - film and television dramas from the world before he traveled through time, are all already completed films. When Lu Yanhe wrote the script, what came to mind were the scenes in the finished film.
Whether you cry or laugh, whether you are angry or sad, you already have a reference.
Lu Yanhe would imitate subconsciously.
This movie was also the first one that Lu Yanhe thought of, suitable for Li Zhibai and Yan Liang starring together.
After Lu Yanhe had so many thoughts running through his mind, he couldn't help but sigh that he had only acted in a few plays and yet he had told himself so many sound truths.
When Ming Ming was reading the project book and looking at the synopsis of the story, he clearly felt that this story would be a very interesting story, but how could it be so boring when it was written into a script?
Lu Yanhe closed the script in silence and thought for a long time.
Hu Siwei said yes.
And Lu Yanhe didn't want to change the name.
Lu Yanhe took a deep breath.
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Lu Yanhe sent the revised scripts of "Raise the Red Lantern" and "Rouge Button" to Chen Bige:
Sister Bi Ge, the first draft of the script has been written.
Although the script of "Under the Roof" looks thick, it actually doesn't have many words.
Moreover, he will subconsciously feel that his performance is not as good as the original work.
One is "Dumb and Dumber" and the other is "Squid Game". These are the two scripts Lu Yanhe is writing.
"As for the script, if you have any ideas, you can tell me." Hu Siwei said, "This is just the first draft of the first four episodes, and there should be a lot of revisions later."
The original movie stars Jim Carrey and Jeff Daniels and is a classic comedy movie.
Hu Siwei came over at this time.
After getting this done, Lu Yanhe breathed a sigh of relief.
It doesn’t have to be high-end, nor does it have to be beautifully written, it even has to have a breath of life, and it has to look like what happens in our lives.
But first it must be natural and have a sense of life.
The translation of Dumb and Dumber into Dumb and Agua completely follows the Chinese expression feelings.
Eight episodes of short drama, "Under the Roof".
But once the performance becomes a subconscious imitation, no matter how similar the imitation is, the most critical part of the performance is lost, which is the empathy and empathy from the depths of the soul.
"The first draft of the script has been written." He came to tell Lu Yanhe, "This is the script."
I can’t say it’s mystifying, it’s very artificial anyway.
He didn't know how to describe his feelings. This script... was a bit unsatisfactory.
Are they going to rely on such a script to make a drama that can turn the tide in Beijing and Taiwan’s ratings?
Lu Yanhe felt incredible.
It took Lu Yanhe almost only one afternoon to read the script.
So far, he has written three scripts, and the fourth script will be "Dumb and Dumber" for Li Zhibai and Yan Liang.
Lu Yanhe was stunned.
It's just that this movie needs to be adapted a little by him, and the ages of the two protagonists need to be changed slightly. Of course, Lu Yanhe chose it precisely because the entire plot is suitable for Li Zhibai and Yan Liang to act, as long as they can let it go.
Lu Yanhe frowned and finished reading the script, not knowing where to start.
Hu Siwei: It’s okay. Just say what you want to say directly. This is the first draft. It’s definitely impossible to film according to this script. It needs a lot of revisions. It’s normal.
To put it bluntly, you still need to find motives and excuses for your actions.
Lu Yanhe watched "Dumb and Dumber" with his classmates. Lu Yanhe still remembers how he and his classmates laughed so hard while watching this movie.
Lu Yanhe also likes many movies, and they are also classics, but that is not because of the script. If you really look at the script, it may be a very boring and simple story, or an essay without a main story, or a movie. It's not mainly because of the script that it's good. Those movies were all passed by Lu Yanhe. It's not that he doesn't like it, it's just that he can't replicate it through the script. For example, Wong Kar-Wai's "The Grandmaster" or the famous Hollywood musical "Mamma Mia".
Idiot combination.
Hu Siwei handed a script into Lu Yanhe's hands.
Without self-confidence, an actor's performance will become extremely fragile.
He sent a message to Hu Siwei: Producer Hu, is this a script written by your friend?
Hu Siwei: No, he found a screenwriter to write it. What do you think?
Lu Yanhe: I don’t know what to say.
Lu Yanhe has one principle when adapting movies from his own memory, that is, the storyline is strong enough.
He said: "Let me take a look first."
He has watched good sitcoms such as "Friends", "The Big Bang Theory" and "My Family" and knows what a good life comedy looks like.
Lu Yanhe nodded.
This name...inexplicably made him feel that he was not very popular.
From the beginning of "Under the Roof", it is a bit mysterious. It starts with the sentence "We have learned the word friendship in the classroom since we were young, but maybe we will not understand what friendship is until a long time later." ".
Lu Yanhe said: To be honest, if the script was like this, I wouldn't want to film it.
Hu Siwei: Is it so bad?
Lu Yanhe said: Haven’t you read it?
Hu Siwei: I just flipped through it casually.
Lu Yanhe: Read it yourself first.
Hu Siwei: When you read the synopsis of the story before, didn’t you think it was well written?
Lu Yanhe said: The outline of the story was really well written, so I was moved. I even turned down the leading actor in a movie for this drama. As a result, I couldn't finish the script.
Hu Siwei: Is the script so bad? I'll read it carefully.
Lu Yanhe sighed.
After working on it for a long time, Hu Siwei didn't even read the script.
Lu Yanhe really felt bad about the script of "Under the Roof". After he finished chatting with Hu Siwei, he thought for a long time and tried to write the first episode according to the outline of the script he had read before.
In short, it means changing the script.
The play tells the story of six young people who met in a city and became friends.
It does not have a clear main story. It basically talks about the happiness and troubles in their lives and work, as well as all the jokes that happen in the middle.
In the outline of the script that Lu Yanhe had read before, these six people were given very clear settings. Six different personalities and six different professional backgrounds come together to create various stories.
There are no complicated plots or twists, it's just a comedy of life.
Lu Yanhe thought for a long time and decided to combine the first episode of "Friends" and "The Big Bang Theory" to write the beginning of this story.
Because her fiancé Hu Fan's ex-girlfriend came to her dressing room on her wedding day and told her that she was pregnant with Hu Fan's child, Li Lili ran away from the wedding venue. As a result, she happened to see her former good friend Chen Wanqiu outside a cafe, so, She rushed in and met Chen Wanqiu and her friends.
Li Lili had nowhere to go and was taken in by Chen Wanqiu. Jiang Cola and Wen Fan, who lived in the same apartment building, fell in love with the beautiful Li Lili with a sweet smile at a glance. They wanted to pursue her and launched their own offensive.
Li Lili asked everyone to accompany her to her fiancé's house in order to take her things out. When everyone knew that Li Lili suddenly left the wedding venue and left a mess behind, they all began to sympathize with her fiancé Hu Fan. Seeing that everyone began to sympathize with Hu Fan, Li Lili angrily stated the reason for her escape. Hu Fan said that was impossible because he had never had a relationship with his ex-girlfriend. Li Lili didn't believe it.
In order to make Li Lili change her mind, Hu Fan also moved to their apartment building.
That’s it for the first episode.
For a sitcom, the first episode is a hook, but the hook cannot be too complicated, the process must be relaxed and funny, and the ending must make everyone want to know what happens next.
The sudden gathering of several people from different places into one place is one of the most classic hooks. It will naturally make the audience curious about the story of what happened after these people got together.
Lu Yanhe wrote the script for the first episode, read it again, revised some details, and sent it to Hu Siwei.
He said: This is the script of the first episode that I revised. Producer Hu, this is the script I want to read.
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Hu Siwei only read the first two episodes of the script before admitting that the script was indeed terrible.
He picked up his cell phone and called Bai Jingnian: "Brother, where did you find the script written by Pheasant?"
He was not polite at all.
Bai Jingnian asked: "Have you read the script?"
"After watching the first two episodes, they were so bad that I didn't even want to say anything." Hu Siwei said directly.
Bai Jingnian sighed, "I'm speechless too. I spent a lot of money to find a well-known screenwriter to write it, but they handed me something like this."
"Who?"
"He Shi is responsible."
"He stopped writing his own scripts a long time ago. He opened a screenwriting studio and gave all the work he took to his apprentices to write." Hu Siwei said, "No wonder the scripts are so bad. Didn't you say before that you should write the scripts yourself? "
"I found that I couldn't write it. I thought of such a story outline and thought I could write it, but it turned out that it was not the material at all." Bai Jingnian sighed, "Did you send it to Lu Yanhe? What did he say?"
Hu Siwei: "I've said it all, do you think he will say it?"
Bai Jingnian: "It's my fault. I didn't ask you before I asked the screenwriter. Why did that old guy only charge me 50,000 yuan per episode?"
Hu Siwei was shocked and asked, "Have you already spent 400,000?"
"I paid him a deposit before I even paid him the balance." Bai Jingnian said, "I'm going to call him and scold him, but I don't plan to pay the balance."
Hu Siwei: "How can you do things like this? Have you signed the contract?"
Bai Jingnian: "I signed it. After the first four episodes, I will write the next four episodes."
"Then we definitely can't ask him to write it." Hu Siwei said, "I'll go talk to him. This crappy script has the nerve to charge 50,000 an episode."
Bai Jingnian: "What should we do? Lu Yanhe is not satisfied with the script. We have to find someone to rewrite it."
Hu Si thought for a while and said, "Let me think about which screenwriter is more suitable."
After hanging up the phone, Hu Siwei sighed, but saw unread messages on his phone. At first glance, it turned out to be a document sent by Lu Yanhe.
——This is the script of the first episode that I revised. Producer Hu, this is the script I want to read.
Hu Sisi was stunned.
Lu Yanhe had told him before that he had a sitcom script that he wanted to write, but he didn't expect that Lu Yanhe would start writing it himself so quickly.
But Hu Siwei didn't take it too seriously.
What kind of scripts can an actor who has just started acting write?
I feel good about myself after finishing writing.
Hu Siwei opened the document and was stunned as soon as he read the first few lines.
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City A, Meet Cafe, is located in the bustling city center of City A.
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Chen Wanqiu: Can you two stop looking at the woman by the window so lustfully? It makes me feel embarrassed to sit with you.
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Jiang Cola: Have you never learned "A fair lady, a gentleman is a good man"? -
Wen Fan: Translated into vernacular, it means we like to look at beautiful women.
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Chen Wanqiu rolled his eyes at Zhou Zhixi silently.
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Zhou Zhixi: That’s why I keep telling you that men are vulgar.
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Chen Wanqiu: My dear, don’t put your hand on my thigh while saying that men are vulgar.
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Jiang Cole and Wen Fan turned back at the same time and glanced at Zhou Zhixi and Chen Wanqiu with ambiguous eyes.
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Zhou Zhixi immediately took his hands off Chen Wanqiu's legs, and the two of them made disgusting expressions at the same time.
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Zhou Zhixi: If you look at us like this again, I will poke your eyeballs out!
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Hu Siwei has worked in Beijing and Taiwan for many years. He has been a producer and supervisor of many dramas. He also worked as an assistant director and accountant before. All his work for so many years has been dealing with the crew and he has read countless scripts. Lift.
What is a good script?
Hu Siwei has his own criteria for judging, which is a script that makes people want to read it.
The difference between a script and a novel is that there is no narrative, introductory, or foreshadowing description.
Right from the start, it’s the location, the characters, and the lines.
This opening written by Lu Yanhe, not to mention how superb, certainly cannot be called superb, but all the main characters are introduced, and in just a few lines of dialogue, the main characters and relationships of each character are explained. Presented, along with changes in mood and state.
Hu Siwei's professional acumen reminded him that at least this was a good beginning.
And when he read the end of the first episode, he was stunned again.
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Li Lili picked up the garbage bag and prepared to throw away the garbage.
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Chen Wanqiu: I think Hu Fan is very good. He is handsome and emotionally stable. You made your wedding a mess, but he is still very gentle to you. If he is not lying, you should seriously consider marrying him. .
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Li Lili opened the door and said: If he didn't lie, then it was really me who messed up our wedding. How could I have the nerve to see him?
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After Li Lili finished speaking, she opened the door and walked to the corridor.
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The neighbor's door was open and two men were moving a television inside.
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Chen Wanqiu walked to the door and asked: Is someone finally coming to live next door? -
Hu Fan came up from the stairs holding a box, saw them, and smiled at them.
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Li Lili asked in surprise: Why are you here? -
Hu Fan said: If you don’t want to believe me, I have no choice but to move here. We will be neighbors from now on.
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Hu Siwei put down his phone and stared blankly at the night outside the window.
The script for the first episode written by Lu Yanhe actually made him read it in one sitting. It was smooth and natural, and there were many laugh-out-loud moments in the middle.
There was only one question left in Hu Siwei's mind: Was this really written by Lu Yanhe?
After a while, he realized another question: Did Lu Yanhe just spend a few hours writing this?
From the time he handed the script to Lu Yanhe, to Lu Yanhe telling him that the script was terrible, to Lu Yanhe sending him the first episode script he wrote, it took no more than ten hours in total.
Hu Si Si was confused.
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"You said this script was written by Lu Yanhe himself?"
Bai Jingnian looked at Hu Siwei in disbelief and asked.
It was late at night, Bai Jingnian had gone to bed, and suddenly Hu Siwei knocked on the door and barged in. Bai Jingnian thought something big had happened, but Hu Siwei told him that he had got a new script, the first episode, urging him He read the script.
Bai Jingnian was still unhappy at first, but after reading the script, his expression immediately changed and he asked him who wrote the script.
"You said earlier that you found someone to write the script. If you tell me, why would I blame He Shi?" Bai Jingnian thought it was written by the screenwriter Hu Siwei had found before.
When Hu Siwei explained how the script came about, Bai Jingnian fell into Hu Siwei's initial state of disbelief.
Hu Siwei: "It was written by Lu Yanhe, and he just wrote it."
"How is that possible?" Bai Jingnian looked at Hu Siwei in disbelief, "He wrote the script for this episode in just a few hours?"
Hu Siwei: "It should be like this."
The two looked at each other.
After a long while, Bai Jingnian said: "Hu Siwei, we have to get Lu Yanhe to agree to help us write the script."
Hu Siwei looked at him and said, "The question now is whether they are willing to help us write the script."
Bai Jingnian said: "What is the budget for our script?"
Hu Siwei said: "The original budget was 200,000 yuan per episode."
Bai Jingnian said: "Do you think Lu Yanhe will agree?"
Hu Siwei shook his head, "He lacks the million?"
Bai Jingnian: "What should we do?"
Hu Siwei pondered for a moment, "Let me talk to him and see what he thinks."
"I must make him agree to write the script." Bai Jingnian said, "He perfectly wrote the feeling I wanted."
Hu Siwei glanced at him sideways.
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The next day, Lu Yanhe sat in the school cafe and looked seriously at Hu Siwei and Bai Jingnian sitting opposite him.
The two people opposite looked a little nervous.
Others felt strange when they saw this scene.
A young student was calm and serious, while the two middle-aged people were as nervous as students waiting for the instructor's evaluation.
"You want me to be the screenwriter of this drama?" Lu Yanhe confirmed again.
Bai Jingnian nodded immediately and said: "Yes, to be honest, I wanted to write the script myself at first, but after writing a little bit, I couldn't get the feeling I wanted, so I asked someone else to write it. In the end, I found someone else to write it. That person was also a piece of rubbish and fooled me into trouble. Hu Siwei came to me last night with the script you wrote. As soon as I finished reading it, I was so excited that I couldn’t sleep."
Lu Yanhe was a little surprised, "The script I wrote was not that good, right? You are exaggerating."
"There is absolutely no exaggeration, it's just the feeling I want." Bai Jingnian said, "I just want to write about the most ordinary side of a few young people. What they experience is dramatic and comedic, but their living conditions It’s absolutely life-oriented.”
Lu Yanhe understood what he was talking about.
He nodded.
"It's okay to let me be the screenwriter, but I have a few requirements." He said.
Hu Siwei: "You said, as long as we can be satisfied, we will be satisfied."
Lu Yanhe said: "First, the name of this drama needs to be changed. I don't like the name "Under the Roof"."
Hu Siwei looked at Bai Jingnian.
This name was chosen by Bai Jingnian himself.
Bai Jingnian nodded without hesitation and said, "No problem, it's up to you."
Lu Yanhe added: "Second, there are two characters in it. I have target actors. I hope to leave these two roles to my target actors."
Bai Jingnian looked at Hu Siwei.
Hu Siwei said: "As long as it doesn't exceed our salary budget, it's no problem."
Lu Yanhe nodded, "Of course."
Hu Sisi thought of something else and asked, "Yan He, which role are you planning to play?"
Lu Yanhe said: "Jiang Cole, he is just an actor in it. He is very different from my character. I want to challenge him."
Hu Si Siwei was a little surprised when he heard this and said, "But the role of Jiang Cola doesn't seem to be the most important role?"
Although this is a sitcom in which all six characters are the protagonists, there is still some emphasis among the six characters.
At least from the story of the first season, Hu Fan is the leading actor.
The only main line is whether Hu Fan and Li Lili can get back together.
Lu Yanhe said: "I don't need to play the most important role, it doesn't matter."
Hu Siwei hesitated for a moment and nodded.
Even if Lu Yanhe is not the leading actor in the plot, he is definitely not a supporting role, which is not impossible.
In fact, according to Hu Siwei's idea, Lu Yanhe would be the best to play the first leading role.
"Then we can increase the weight of Jiang Cola's role in the script." Hu Siwei said, "After all, you are the only first-line actor in the play."
"It doesn't matter. After this drama is aired, I think all six of them will become first-line actors." Lu Yanhe said calmly, "Producer Hu, when I read the project book, I took on this project with such expectations. .”
Hu Siwei and Bai Jingnian looked at each other and fell silent.
Lu Yanhe was so confident in this drama that neither of them expected.
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Lu Yanhe took care of the creative matters, and Chen Ziyan took over the other matters.
"The film salary + screenwriter's fee is 200 million yuan per episode. In addition, Yan He will enjoy 10% of the income of this drama." Chen Ziyan said.
Hu Siwei looked embarrassed for a moment.
"10%? Zi Yan, this is an almost impossible number." Hu Siwei said.
Chen Ziyan's attitude was very firm, saying: "The only leading actor and the only screenwriter who can handle the ratings, Yan He is worthy of this number."
Hu Siwei actually knew that Chen Ziyan was right.
In fact, taking profit sharing is a very common phenomenon in foreign film and television circles, especially for the core characters of a drama.
Lu Yanhe is obviously such a core character in this drama.
However, in a traditional TV station like Beijing and Taiwan, the main creative staff are almost never given such treatment.
At most, the salary will be higher and the royalties will be higher.
But Chen Ziyan said: "Without Yan He, your drama would definitely not be able to be filmed. You know this very well."
Hu Siwei said: "It is more realistic to increase the price from 200 million yuan per episode to 500 million yuan per episode than to get 10% of the income. This is not something I can decide, Ziyan, and it is difficult for Taiwan to agree to such an approach. They don't I would be willing to set such a precedent."
Chen Ziyan said: "That's your business, Producer Hu. If you want to create an evergreen tree that can extend the life of Beijing and Taiwan, a sitcom that can continue for a long time, then you have to pay the treatment you deserve."
Hu Siwei was silent for a while and said: "The film salary plus scriptwriting fee is 150 million yuan per episode and 5% of the income. I will fight for it with the station."
Chen Ziyan: "There is no need to negotiate. 10% is already too small for me to open my mouth. If I really want to open my mouth wide, I would not be exaggerating even if I want 20%, you know."
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